Sunday, September 18, 2011

Sample Sunday: Polar Night Prologue

Ever since I had the dream that inspired me to take my suspense novel in a totally different direction, I've been thrilled as I've been able to make more progress on it in the past two weeks than I previously had over the whole summer. I thought I would share the prologue I wrote to start the novel. My hope is that sharing part of it will help me to keep going at this pace, as sharing the story somehow makes it feel more "real."

The prologue is quite short, but I hope that it captures both the atmosphere of the story and the interest of readers. The working title for the novel is Polar Night.


He loved the cold.

Raw, icy, bone chilling cold. It reminded him of home. Of February. Of her.

Most couldn't tolerate the harsh Alaskan winters. But he wasn't like most. He didn't fear the cold. He embraced it.

He stared out at the barren white landscape in front of him, and brushed a strand of straight blond hair from his forehead. He shook the snowflakes from his long, gloved fingers, and put his hands back into the pockets of his black coat.

He loved the cold, yes, but he loved the night even more. His first winter in Alaska had convinced him to make the state his American home. He knew he had found the right place.

He lived for the night. And it was coming.

It was almost December, and the darkness was coming.

When it came, she would be his again. He felt a rush of anticipation as he turned to go back inside.

The darkness was almost here.


  1. Hi Julie. I'm here from Rachael's campaigner blog, and am now your newest follower, so:

    Nice to meet you!

    I enjoyed the excerpt of your prologue.

  2. Most enjoyable prologue hope to read more when time permits.


  3. Very nice. I'm curious about this cold and night thing, and who the woman is.

  4. @Matthew, hi, great to meet you! Thanks for coming by, I will be over at your blog soon. Glad you liked the prologue, thanks so much. I love your Yoda picture! :)

    @Yvonne, thank you, I appreciate it.

    @LG, thanks! :)

  5. 'Polar Night' is a great title. It speaks volumes, especially in a thriller (it is a thriller, right, considering our group in the #campaign?) I'm struggling with my title right now.

    Nicely shaped prologue, too, btw.

  6. A wonderful prologue. A great start to a great book, eh? (Keep those dreams coming!)

  7. Very chilling--no pun intended. Makes me want to read more.

  8. Great. Atmospheric. And how brilliant that your dream sent you off on such a fruitful route. Good luck.

  9. Excellent prologue! I can't wait to read what happens next! You're off to a great start! Julie

  10. @worddreams, thank you, I really appreciate your comments! It is a thriller, yes, thanks so much. Best of luck with your title, I'm sure it will come to you.

    @Susan, thank you, I sure hope so!

    @Lisa, thanks, I'm so glad! :)

    @Yvonne, oh, I'm sorry you were sick, that does sound awful. :(

    @Rosalind, Thank you, I appreciate it!

  11. Ooh, creepy guy. Now I want to know more.

  12. @Julie, I'm sorry, I think we must have posted at the same time earlier, I didn't see your comment! Thanks so much, I'm thrilled you are interested in seeing what happens next.

    @Carol, thanks! I do want him to be very creepy LOL.

  13. I'm completely wanting to turn the page to find out what's next. Very haunting and poetic. Great job. :)

  14. @Mary, thank you, I'm so glad you like it! :)

  15. Oh, so intriguing. Really enjoyed this - I'd love more!

  16. I am enticed and want more. It's a great prologue. I like your short sentences. They add to the cold feel of the piece.


  17. This is very intriguing. Now I want to know who she is and why he can't see her until the darkness comes. I am brimming with questions.

  18. @Tara, thank you! I'm so glad you are interested in more, thanks so much, I really appreciate it.

    @Robyn, oh, thanks, I felt like the short sentences fit the mood I wanted, so I'm so glad you liked them. Thank you!

    @Angela, thanks so much, I'm so glad you find the prologue intriguing. Your comments are great inspiration, thank you!

  19. Chilling. I can't wait to read more. :)


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